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I think copy and deleting is a more useful tool to me than reading out loud. I have tried reading out loud, and even then I still lose my concentration- so when I can copy and paste a part of a paragraph, then it helps me read the whole thing easier. For me it is way easier reading a story little by little, then reading the story as a whole. I am a little surprised at how much more helpful it is for me to copy and paste than it is to simply read out loud. I use this strategy quite a bit actually; I have always found that I lose focus reading long stories so this strategy helps me a lot. This strategy helps me with any story I read, which is why I like this so much! Using a timer has never been the best way for feedback for me.. it actually makes me feel more pressured, even if I am not under a time constraint. So I don't think I would use this feedback anytime in the future.

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Reading Notes: Persian Tales Part B

For the second part of my reading I chose to do another chapter about a wolf so I could combine the two! This story starts out with a wedding, and by the end, the bride has turned into a wolf out of nowhere and tore her husband apart. Then she immediately turns back into her normal self without any idea how it happened or what exactly happened. So to change the story I would have it connect back to my part A of the story. Instead of a girl marrying a man, it would be the goat and the wolf from the beginning of my story. After the wolf had protected his house and managed to calm down the goat, they would have spoken about the miscommunication and the mother goat decided to let the kids have a play date with the wolf’s child. After a few play dates, they would begin going on dates without the children and decide that they have been falling in love! So in a twist of fate, the goat and wolf would fall in love and get married. Once getting married, no one would kill the other (like in the original), but they would live happily ever after like any other cheesy love story. The baby goats would then see the baby wolf as their new sibling and they would become best friends. After spending a couple years together, they would eventually realize that they could not keep up with rebuilding a house every time the wolf would huff, puff, and sneeze their house down. So they would learn what materials to build their house out of, and make sure it didn’t happen to any other unlucky people who built a house next to theirs.

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This story is part of the Persian Tales unit. Story source: Persian Tales: The Story of the Wolf-Bride , translated by D.L.R. Lorimer and E.O. Lorimer and illustrated by Hilda Roberts (1919).

Reading Notes: Persian Tales Part A

This week I chose to do my story notes over Persian Tales. Because my boyfriend's family is Persian, I thought it would be interesting to read more into some of their stories! I read most of the story and loved the part of The Goat and the Wolf. This part of the story was very cool to me because it showed how the mother goat's motherly instincts set in once her children had gone missing. I think instead of the wolf overhearing the mother warn her kids about not letting a stranger in, the wolf would just be wandering by at the wrong time. The wolf could be a good guy and end up in the wrong place at the wrong time. Instead of the wolf breaking in and kidnapping the kids, he would try and sell them cookies for a fundraiser for his own child. In the story, only one of the baby goats was able to escape and hide when the wolf kidnapped the others, so I would change it to where all of the kids followed the wolf. While the wolf tried to sell them cookies, the kids would end up following the wolf home to try and buy more cookies because the wolf did not bring enough to their home. When the mother gets back home, she will notice her kids are missing and start an adventure to find them. When she gets to the Wolf's house, she will become extremely worried and try to break into the Wolf's house to fight him to get her kids back. Little will she know that the kids will be out in the wolf's backyard playing with his child and eating cookies! So when the wolf answers and tries to explain where her kids are, she won't believe him and become angry anyways. So while the mother goat tries to get her children back, who are not in any harm, she does everything in her power to get inside the wolf's house while he does everything he can to make sure his home is not destroyed by an overprotective mother.

Wolf and Goat

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Story source: Persian Tales: The Wolf and the Goat, translated by D.L.R. Lorimer and E.O. Lorimer and illustrated by Hilda Roberts (1919). Link to Story