My Feedback Thoughts!

Giving feedback has always been a somewhat difficult task for me, simply for the fact I do not want to hurt anyone's feelings! At the same time, receiving negative feedback can hurt as well, although I have learned that no one means any harm, they simply are just giving feedback! That's why the article I thought was the most interesting to me was, Why Rejection Hurts So Much- and What to do About It. I liked this article because it talked about both sides of this situation and why people handle it differently, and I think that helped me understand it a little bit more as well. I have learned that you have to be careful with your choice of words when giving feedback though, especially over the internet. When people read words over the computer, they may read it in a different way that you intended when originally leaving the comment. So just be courteous when leaving feedback!
I have had a few times outside of school where I have had to give negative feedback, and I never feel good about it. I manage at a restaurant and have realized that nothing will change for the better if you do not tell people to fix something that is going wrong. If no one knows they are doing something wrong, then it will never get fixed. I have learned this way that no one is trying to be mean when giving feedback, but they are just trying to help you. Like I said above, I used to take negative feedback somewhat to the heart too. But as I have gone through many classes where feedback is necessary, I have realized that I need to just accept it as is and fix what may, or may not, be wrong with my writing!

Happy, Mutual, and Negative 

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Story: The Two Great Battles

As the men approached the forbidden cave where the giant, robot cyclops lived, they could hear the deep growling from a mile away… The men strapped their armor on and added as much armor to their hover craft that they could before they ran out of time. As they hovered closer and closer to the cave, they could feel the tension so hard they could cut it with their metal swords.

The cyclops could hear the men approaching; he grabbed every piece of armor he had and every one of his weapons he owned. Although, none would do the trick like his Valyrian Steel sword would. He strapped all of his armor on, and locked everything important to him away in case the men were able to invade his cave. Once he heard the hovercraft board his island, he made his way to the beach where the soldiers had arrived.

The soldiers and the cyclops were finally face to face. While there is only one of the cyclops, and hundreds of soldiers, the cyclops’ power outnumbered the men 50 to 1. You could see the soldiers shaking as they saw the giant robot wielded his incredible sword towards them. Each men knew that the only way to win this battle was to fight with all of their strength and fight like they never had before. While the cyclops was waiting for the men to make the first move, he pulled the lever to his grenade launcher and watched it fly past the men’s hovercraft; almost like he was teasing them. The soldiers knew it was time to make their move before it was too late.

The soldiers fought with all of their might and used all of their weapons against this giant monster. The soldiers had every gun in the world, even those that were not able to be used outside of the government, and fought with every bit of strength they possessed. The cyclops robot put up a hell of a fight, and held them off for as long as he could; he even took half of the army’s soldier’s lives doing so. Yet, he did not prevail.

The men fought long and hard and did their very best to win this battle. Which they did, after many hours of fighting against the giant cyclops. Although it was not an easy battle, they decided to spare the cyclops’s life and tie him to their hovercraft to take him back to headquarters to be tested on. After the cyclops had been secured down, they took every bit of something worth any money, and took every weapon they could find.

On their way back to headquarters, they would have to pass the island of the Sirens; deadly creatures to anyone who would hear their singing if they felt threatened. The only way to get back home was to pass this isle, so they did as quiet and stealthy as they could. Little did the men know that the cyclops was still awake enough to groan in pain…

While they were passing the isle, the cyclops did in fact groan as loudly as he could. Thankfully for the men, they still had their armor on and the craft was still covered in metal armor to be protected as well.

The evil mermaid, sirens tried as hard as they could to attack this hovercraft and sang as loud as possible to try and capture every man on board. While only a few men were aware of the singing, the others were falling off the hovercraft due to the singing of the sirens being so deadly. Each and every men that fell off the craft were immediately taken by the mermaids and were dragged back to their isle to receive their fate.

The few men that did survive the battle of the sirens made their way back to headquarters, only to find that the cyclops had somehow untied himself and let himself loose near the siren’s island. Which is why this island is now known as the most deadly island in the world and must not ever be passed by again.

Soldiers in battle

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Author's Note:

This story was taken from the original story of Homer's Odyssey. The two parts from this story I had taken were from the story of the evil Cyclops and the beautiful Sirens. Each part of these stories were changed slightly to be a little bit more futuristic and up to date of what it would be more like if this happened today. 

Bibliography:

Homer's story, The Odyssey. Link to The Odyssey

Reading Notes for homer's Odyssey part 2!

For this section of the story I am choosing to write about the Siren’s Isle. This has always been my favorite part of The Odyssey! Although, changing the story to fit the futuristic theme might be semi-difficult, so I’m hoping for the best here. Instead of the soldiers sailing past the isle in a boat, they would be in a hovercraft with the rest of their weapons and loot they had stolen from the Cyclops. The men would pass by the isle and see the most strange, pretty, mermaid-type creatures they have ever seen. They did, however, know that these creatures were the most evil, quickest, sneaky and dangerous types of women. So the men would do everything in their power to make sure that harm would come to none of the soldiers on board. They would wear every bit of armor they had on the ship, and arm the hovercraft with the strongest steel they stole from the Cyclops in case these creatures felt threatened in anyway.


By the time they would come near the isle, the Siren’s would already be ready to defend their land. The hover craft and mass weapons and protection upon the hovercraft would have spooked them already. As soon as the Sirens swam closer to the hovercraft, they would begin to sing their song, which the soldiers soon realized was much more. The song of the sirens would be deadly to anyone who would hear the song for longer than thirty seconds…

Evil Mermaid

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Bibliography:

Homer's The Odyssey. Link to Siren's Section of The Odyssey

Reading Notes for Homer's Odyssey

I chose to write my notes over Homer's Odyssey! I have always loved this story and got really into it when we read it in middle school. Although, I have not read this in a while so I wanted to read up on it again. I do think it would be cool to change the setting of this story in the future instead of the 12th century. Instead of the cyclops being a “monster” I would probably change him to a giant robot with a robotic eye. I would keep the story around the same but have the setting a little different with futuristic objects, medicine, weapons, and people. Instead of a giant club the Cyclops owned, he would wield a sword made of Valyrian Steel and the soldiers from would be wearing uniforms made of Baratheon Steel. Each weapon would be stronger than the other in their own way making the fight between the two sides very strenuous.

The battle would consist of the soldiers all using their futuristic guns, tanks, and their best robot men to win the battle. The giant Cyclops’s weapon of choice is his giant sword, but still uses other futuristic weapons to his advantage. The entire cave the cyclops lives in is filled with every weapon you could think of; from a wooden club with spikes to grenade launchers and light sabers. Once the soldiers win the battle, they would take over the cyclops’s cave and take all of his belongings; each expensive painting, every weapon on display, and his Valyrian Sword- the greatest triumph to be won.

The Robot Cyclops

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Bibliography
Homer’s The Odyssey. Link to The Odyssey